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Mark Plum's avatar

The first thing that stands out is tone. Jack as a narrator is gentle, his voice consistent, and he wins us over quickly with smart language economy. The story doesn’t oversell its emotion. The themes are present but subtle, and you trust the reader to gradually arrive at meaning. That's smart writing.

The month-by-month structure gives the story a steady rhythm. But what impressed me most is your restraint. You appear to write with a quiet confidence that gives your style good weight.

This is a wonderful addition to Substack. I think you're writing in a space where both your fiction and theological instincts could really thrive, which is a rich overlap. Don’t hesitate to tag me as you post more. I'd love to keep reading.

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josie's avatar

this was so good what. i loved it way more than i expected 🥹

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